Chapter 111 ReplacementEdit

Xiaoli quickly put away her smile, but it was too late.

After Song Tai's gaze stayed on her for a few seconds, he turned his head and asked Li Jiming, "Do you have any suggestions for this comic?"

"It's just that his drawing skills are not very solid, but the setting and story are very good, and the storyboard is also magnificent. It is rare to meet such an outstanding painter now." Li Jiming expressed his opinion.

"Apart from being a painter, what shortcomings does he have?" Song Tai asked.

"Anything else?" Li Jiming scratched his head, unable to remember for a while.

Song Tai looked at Xiaoli again, "I heard that you said that this name has shortcomings at the serialization meeting?"

"Ah?" Xiaoli opened her mouth slightly, her mind was a little dazed, and she subconsciously said, "Mmm."

"What's the shortcoming, let me listen to it, except for the painter." Song Tai asked.

"Disadvantages..." Xiaoli's forehead was sweating, and her throat was a little dry, "That's right. Of course he is not an artist. In fact, although his artistry is not solid, a manga with good art and good storyboarding is not necessarily a good manga. This The biggest problem with the work is the story."

"Story?" Song Tai was slightly taken aback, he never thought it would be a story issue.

"This story is very novel, how could there be a problem? You have a problem, right?" Li Jiming sneered.

"Of course there is a problem!" Xiaoli couldn't bear Li Jiming's ridicule, and said without hesitation, regardless of Yan Fei's wink, "The story of this comic is too loose!"

"What?"

"Too loose?"

"What is Taisan?"

The people in the room looked confused, and even Yan Fei didn't know what Xiaoli was thinking.

"Too loose? How can there be such a shortcoming?" Li Jiming sneered.

Song Tai glanced at the name of the first chapter, "I think the story is okay, what's the matter with your talking too loosely?"

Xiaoli knew that other people were watching her, and she also knew that she had no room to look back, so she could only bite the bullet and say: "President, you will know after reading the three chapters in one go."

Song Tai was dubious, and read the content of the three chapters.

From the second chapter, the protagonist left the underworld to find the reason for the puppet, but he never found it. At the end of the second chapter, he returned to Huangquan again.

Due to the previous experience, the number of guards in Huangquan has doubled compared to before, and souls have also entered Huangquan one after another.

Just when he thought the puppet was just an accident last time, he suddenly noticed that the soul behind him had once again formed a puppet, trying to devour the nearby souls, and walked towards the underworld official, and the war was about to break out.

The third chapter is nothing complicated, just the main character and the puppet, and a thrilling and fierce fight unfolds.

"San... Where is it?" Song Tai looked up at Xiaoli after reading it.

Li Jiming saw Xiaoli with a tangled face, the corners of her mouth were slightly raised, and she smiled inadvertently.

"Scattered... the structure of its story." Xiaoli hesitated, "There is a problem with the structure of its story."

"Isn't what you said too false? What's wrong with the structure?" Li Jiming asked rhetorically.

"Brother Li, you are also an old editor, so you should be clear. The reason why the first chapter has more than 50 pages is to use a small climax to attract readers, and then the story will slowly unfold. The background, the first chapter has to be covered, and from the second chapter onwards, it has to be expanded, right?"

"That's right. Cough cough... Teacher Pang Haihai also painted like this. Is there any problem?" Li Jiming asked.

"Yes. The name of "Ghost Poses" has been drawn to the third chapter. Let me ask you, what is the connection between the title and the story? In the third chapter, I didn't even explain what "Ghost Poses" is. Is the structure still loose? I remember Shen The teacher pointed out the origin of the title of "Y's" in the first chapter, and the rest of the story has been around Iori and Yigui. But "Ghost Power", until now,

It's more than exciting, but it's easy to confuse the reader. "At the end of Xiaoli's speech, she also gained confidence.

On the contrary, Li Jiming was a little at a loss, he hesitated, and didn't know how to explain for a while.

Song Tai nodded slightly, "There is such a point. The first three chapters really emphasized the plot too much, but neglected the theme that the comics most need to express. Lao Li, you shouldn't make this kind of mistake."

"I was not careful... This situation will definitely not happen next time." Li Jiming explained quickly.

He only cared about whether the story was exciting, but forgot about the arrangement of the plot.

"Is that so? Teacher 'Fat Dahai' has great ideas, and the storyboard is not bad, but the story still needs to be tempered. After all, he is also a strong newcomer in "New World". It's just other things..." Song Tai knocked twice. After getting off the table, he suddenly handed the name to Xiao Li, "Xiao Li, from now on, you and "Ghost Possession", after all, you are both young people, and it is not easy to have a generation gap. By the way, communicate with him and ask him to change his pen name. Lao Li, you Also take time to improve your business level."

"Huh?"

"Eh?"

Li Jiming and Xiaoli both exclaimed in surprise.

Things reversed a little quickly.

"Xiaoli, you have to follow along carefully and try to bring out another copy of "Y's". Song Ren, quickly find the audio of the voice actor and send it to Mr. Shen." Song Tai waved his hand and signaled everyone to leave.

After leaving the office, Xiao Li breathed a sigh of relief.

Li Jiming snorted coldly, didn't say much, and went down the stairs angrily, and Song Ren also entered the elevator.

Xiaoli held Yan Fei's hand tightly all the time, and came to the reception room to rest.

"Sister Yan, Teacher Shen really saved my life." After Xiaoli sat down, she immediately started talking.

"Teacher Shen Xin?" Yan Fei guessed.

"Who else but him?" Xiaoli nodded repeatedly.

"He hasn't seen the name, has he?"

"No. But what I said was his comment on the short story 'Fat Sea'. I just used it to apply it. In the end, there was a problem with the structure of his novel. Sister Yan, I want to take the time to visit Teacher Shen, can you?"

Yan Fei was taken aback for a moment, and then noticed that Xiaoli's hands on the table were trembling. She can understand Xiaoli's current mood. This newcomer is expected by many people. If she doesn't get up in the end, Xiaoli, the editor in charge, must take the first responsibility.

If Shen Xin can give one or two suggestions, maybe it can give Xiaoli some ideas or confidence.

"Now?"

"When will he have time?" Xiaoli looked forward to it.

"Is it the weekend? Right now, he should be busy drawing the manuscript, so he doesn't have much time. By the way, why don't you go and talk to Li Jiming?" Yan Fei asked.

"I'll go now. He taunted me like that just now, and now it's time for me to fight back. I just like to see him angry and being bullied." Xiaoli said with a smile.

Yan Fei tapped Xiao Li's forehead, "Okay, don't push him too hard."

"Yes!" Xiaoli twisted her neck with excitement.

This week, Xiaoli and Li Jiming completed the handover of work. At the same time, she also met "Fat Dahai". As expected, she is a young lady named Zhou Yang. She has a shy personality and is a good talker. .

At first, Xiaoli thought that Zhou Yang was difficult to get in touch with, but after talking with him, she realized that apart from being a little shy, he was not special, and he was also quite talkative. Besides, what surprised Xiaoli the most was , that is, he has some clothes, including women's clothing.

Could it be the big guy in women's clothing?

Noticing Xiaoli's bright eyes and drooling from the corners of her mouth, Zhou Yang immediately declared that none of these belonged to him, but Xiaoli didn't believe it at all.